The Journey Begins: Part Two

by Sara on November 19, 2009

footsteps-in-the-sandphotograph by MorganLeFaye

Last Thursday, I published “The Journey Begins: Part One.” We left off where the woman was surrounded by fog that had always seemed to scare her.  Here’s the rest of the story…

Ben loved foggy days and would have laughed at her fear. On those days they’d shared, he’d run ahead until she couldn’t see him and then jump out and scare her. When she complained, he stopped her words with a kiss.

She stood quietly for a second, letting the fog swirl around her. It amazed her that just thinking about Ben’s kisses still made her lips tingle.

God, she missed him so much. “How will I ever recover from this?” she asked herself.

Maybe this was how those you loved and lost haunted you; not by being misty ghosts, but by being memories that squeezed the life out of your heart and soul.

She looked towards the ocean and the rushing waves, focusing on the white foam. The tide was coming in, but the boats wouldn’t be out today. A storm was near; she could feel and smell it. She hadn’t always known these things about the ocean. Ben had taught her.

He’d always teased her about being the “city girl”. When they walked the beach together, he made a point of finding something new to share with her. With Ben, the beach became a beautiful, mysterious place full of new adventures waiting to be discovered.

Looking at the beach today, all she saw were broken shells at her feet. She was surrounded by fog and felt the chill of the incoming storm. It saddened her to think that by losing Ben, she might also lose her ability to see the beach’s beauty and mystery.

Stopping for a minute to dig her toes in the sand, out of the corner of her eye she saw something move. She turned to see what it was and the fog lifted for just a second to show her a single baby turtle slowly making its way to the water.

She looked around quickly, but could see no others. Either this was the first to escape its egg, or the last. Whichever, it was struggling desperately to reach its destination.

She knew not to disturb it and knelt down to watch it’s progress. This was the baby turtle’s journey and it had to do it alone. It seemed ages before its tiny flippers kissed the water. Then just as it moved forward, a wave insolently tossed it back onto the beach as if to say, “How dare you tiny creature attempt to enter my waters!”

The tiny turtle righted itself and began its journey all over again. Several tosses later, it finally slipped silently into the water and disappeared.

When it was gone, she fell back on the beach laughing with joy at the turtle’s success while thinking, “God has kissed me on the cheek.” That had been one of Ben’s favorite sayings. It meant that you had witnessed something wondrous and special – a gift from God.

At that moment, she wished more than anything that Ben could be there with her to share this. He would have loved watching the baby turtle. She wrapped her arms around herself and that sweater, breathing in Ben’s scent once again.

A thought occurred to her suddenly. Seeing the turtle was no accident. She knew in her heart that Ben had shown her this turtle. Just as he always had done when they walked the beach, he’d found something special to share with her.

The journey of this tiny turtle was his way of telling her that she too would make it through this difficult time. Like the turtle, she would keep righting herself and moving forward, even when waves tossed her back. And like the turtle, this was a journey she now had to make alone.

Somehow this awareness made her feel lighter and stronger. She continued to sit for awhile on the beach watching the water. Eventually she stood up, dusted the sand from her shorts and turned to walk back.

It was time to go home. She had a lot of packing to do. Her new journey was just beginning.

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How did you feel about the ending of this story?

Have you ever experienced something that seemed magical, like Ben showing her the turtle?

Part of this story actually happened to me, can you guess which part?

P.S. Publishing this story was a leap of faith for me and I thank all of you who read it and left comments of support and encouragement :~)

Recently, I discovered another fiction writer/blogger; Melissa of Black, White & Lace. I encourage you to read her stories. If you have some favorite fiction writers, let us know in the comment box:~)

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Talon November 19, 2009 at 10:31 am

Lovely story, Sara. Whether the turtle’s journey was “a kiss from God” or Ben revealing something important to the character, it was nice that it was her perception that gave her the strength to continue her own journey feeling loved and not abandoned.
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Zeenat | Positive Provocations November 19, 2009 at 11:43 am

Oh Sara,
What a serenely beautiful story. The turtle’s presence at that very moment was just what she needed for clarity of thought. Whether it was her form of understanding or whether it was a sign from the above…it sent her in the right direction ..and thats what counts the most.

Me waiting for her new journey to begin….

Lots of love…
Z
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Jannie Funster November 19, 2009 at 1:29 pm

HOW did I feel?? Joyous at the turtle’s success. Teary-eyed at her thinking the turtle was sent from Ben. Sweet, so sweet about God’s kiss on a cheek. He gives me such kisses each day.

I think the turtle story happened to you, right?
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Melissa November 19, 2009 at 2:31 pm

Wow. I went back and reread the first part as well. What a powerful story. I love the imagery. And thank you so much for linking to me! I really appreciate it. I’m going to post something new that I’ve been working on. It’s a short story right now, but I’d like to expand upon it someday. Let me know what you think!
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Serena November 19, 2009 at 3:30 pm

A wonderful ending, Sara, though not without a little sadness that she would be continuing on alone. Ben showing her the turtle was just perfect and it sent her a powerful message too. As for what part of the story you have experienced yourself? I’m thinking either the fog or the turtle.

Wilma Ham November 19, 2009 at 6:19 pm

Oh I feel the wonderful combination of joy coming through sadness.
We are still connected even if the person we love has gone, that is such a wonderful uplifting consolation.
It is sad yet not all doom and gloom, as life and I think that you must have experienced that to write it so well.

Patty - Why Not Start Now? November 19, 2009 at 8:47 pm

Hi Sara – I loved the ending of the story. It was just right. I have had many magical little moments. One of my most memorable was a hike in the redwoods on a very chill day, coming out upon a vista of ocean and the brightest shaft of light I have ever seen. I knew in that moment the light was a beacon. I’ve come to realize so much of these magical moments is about perception. Like the character choosing to see her own journey in the turtle’s journey. I’m betting something like that happened to you???
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Evelyn Lim November 19, 2009 at 9:57 pm

Very beautiful! I love the ending. There is a touch of warmth and hope. Reading the story is better than having an article with a list of 7 tips! Love it!
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Cath Lawson November 20, 2009 at 12:13 am

Hi Sara – I think the ending was great. I love the way she connected the turtle with Ben and that it helped her make the decision to move forward.

And was dusting the sand from her shorts a metaphor for brushing away the past?
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suzen November 20, 2009 at 9:54 am

Hi Sara!
I think “God kissed YOU on the cheek” while you were writing this! Lovely!!!!
A friend gave me a small turtle made of shells with glasses on – too cute – and it’s on my desk. It says to me “Have the courage to stick your neck out!” You did while posting this! Great job!

Sara November 20, 2009 at 11:19 am

@ Talon — Such a nice comment and what I hoped readers would get from this story. One of the things I wanted to say in this story is that we never know what gift will be given to us to help through difficult times. Thanks for your comment:~)

Sara November 20, 2009 at 11:22 am

@ Zeenat — While I’ve never been able to continue this story or the character, I like to think her new journey did begin and that she’s found happiness. Also, I agree with you about turtle…we never know what it will take to send us “in the right direction” so we need to keep our senses aware. Thank you Zeenat for your support and encouragement:~)

Sara November 20, 2009 at 11:29 am

@ Yes, Jannie I should have known you would sense the part that happened to me. I did experience the turtle and almost exactly as it is described in the story. It was a moment of complete awe for me! It is also true that I have experienced deep grief in my life, but not due to a marriage. As I said to Talon, I believe in our darkest, loneliest times, there is always something or someone waiting to help us find our way out; we just have to be open to the possibilities:~)

Thanks about what you said about “God’s kiss on the cheek.” Also, the kisses you get are very well deserved:~)

Sara November 20, 2009 at 11:34 am

@ Melissa — I’m pleased you liked the story. It was easy to link to you after I read what you had written. I loved it plain and simple. It was the perfect surprise and very clever! I look forward to reading what you’re working on:~)

Sara November 20, 2009 at 11:38 am

@ Serena — Thanks for comment about the ending. You never know how someone will interpret a story’s ending and I knew it would hard for some people to realize Ben wasn’t coming back, but that’s how the story came to me.

Well, actually you’re right on both counts…I kind of forget the fog. It was the turtle experience and it did happen as I wrote it…including the foggy day! Thanks for visiting and sharing:~)

I just realized that everyone now will know what part is true in the story if they read through the comments…Oh well, the secret is out:~)

Sara November 20, 2009 at 11:50 am

@ Wilma — Thank you for your comment and what you said about this story. I do so agree with you about still be connected even when someone dies. I could also say that we don’t really lose people when the die. Whatever time we spent with them is still part of us. Death takes away the body, but not the spirit, which I find very uplifting! Thanks for sharing, Wilma. I always enjoy your take on things:~)

Sara November 20, 2009 at 11:53 am

@ Patty — I loved what you said about magical moments and your description of your own. I think you are right on about magical moments being about perception. Nature has provided me with many such magical moments. I’ve been lucky that I was able to see them for what they were…like you did on your hike. Thanks for your comment…I really appreciate it:~)

Sara November 20, 2009 at 11:58 am

@ Evelyn — I don’t about that regarding the tips…there are so many times when I’ve gone to site and the tips/suggestions given were exactly what I needed to read!!! On the hand, I’m pleased that you liked the story. Blogging gives us so many opportunities to share the different parts of us, doesn’t it?

BTW — I am so PLEASED that you are back and once again inspiring with your posts. I loved your post about how to restore inner harmony and the discussion about intuition:~)

Sara November 20, 2009 at 12:05 pm

@ Cath — I’m happy that you liked the story AND the ending. With fiction, you never know how someone might receive it.

Regarding your comment about the phrase dusting the sand from her shorts being a metaphor for brushing or letting go of the past, I didn’t plan that, but it makes sense. When I write, I tend to get stories full born. I don’t do much planning, but I like this idea very much. It adds more to the story! Thanks for sharing your thought:~)

Sara November 20, 2009 at 12:14 pm

@ SuZen — Oh, that is SOOOOO nice!!! I’m really glad you liked the story and I love your interpretation of your “turtle.” I hadn’t thought of a turtle in that way, but I think you’re right. Thank you:~)

Davina November 21, 2009 at 1:53 pm

Sara this a such beautiful story. Lots of sentiment and warmth — just like Wilma has said: “wonderful combination of joy coming through sadness.” Wonderful job! One of your best stories yet, I must say.
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Sara November 22, 2009 at 2:47 pm

@ Davina — Thank you very much. I’m glad you liked the story:~)

Carol November 26, 2009 at 7:57 am

Beautiful – I loved it, and I knew you had seen that turtle, but I didn’t know that you had experienced deep grief. I love getting to know you this way. You are a gifted writer. Thanks for sharing this part of you . . .
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Sara November 28, 2009 at 11:28 am

@ Carol — You are so welcome and I’m very pleased you enjoyed the story:~)

Kathy Dobson November 30, 2009 at 11:19 am

Sara…you made me cry! Your story touched my heart and my soul. You see, three years ago my ex-husband suddenly passed away. It had been a difficult divorce and he remarried and moved across the country. My daughter was 12 at the time and she hadn’t seen her dad once he moved over 10 years ago. (they didn’t even talk on the phone)
After we found out about his death, I said “let’s go to the beach” in honor of dad (I had not been to the beach all year)…you see, that was one of my ex’s favorite places and I knew we would feel him there. The most interesting thing is this: we went to a part of the beach that I had never been to before and have never been to since.
As Stephi (my daughter) and I walked along the beach that day she suddenly stopped and said mom look….
there in the sand was a beautiful large heart that had been etched into the sand. There were no names or initials etched into it…just the heart. I knew the moment I saw it that it was Stephi’s dad telling her that he loved her (and I’d like to believe me too)…and will always be there for her. We both cried and then Stephi gathered up little shells and delicately placed them into the etching so that the heart was then 3D and oh so beautiful. She then etched RIP Daddy…I Love U… inside the heart. I still cry as I speak about this moment. It is and was one of the most touching moments in life that I have ever experienced.
I know that anyone who walked on the beach that day and came across that beautiful heart with RIP Daddy must have cried too.
Thank you for the memory Sara…
Kathy
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Sara December 1, 2009 at 11:05 am

@ Kathy — Wow…your story made tears come to my eyes. I suppose the beach is a place where magical things can happen and I am happy/sad that your daughter and you experienced that heart. I know how your daughter felt as I lost my dad, who was very dear to me, when I was sixteen. His death taught me about grief and recovery. Thanks for sharing this story, Kathy:~)

Tony Single December 30, 2009 at 7:02 am

I feel like that little turtle at times, trying to crawl into the sea of life but being slapped back by wave after wave. I’ll get there though. I’m not dead yet. Sara, I thought your story was wonderful. Thank you for letting us read it.
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Sara December 31, 2009 at 11:21 am

@ Tony — I’m glad you liked the story. I think of it as story of survival and a reminder that we can get through the dark times….we just have to keep moving forward:~)

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