Haiku Syllables
For this poetry challenge, I wanted to learn how to write Haiku poetry. This type of poetry is structured in how it’s written. The most common form consists of a three-line stanza that has a total of 17 syllables, written with this pattern: Line One – 5 syllables, Line Two – 7 syllables and Line Three – 5 syllables.
I quickly realized that the first thing I had to do was remember how to count syllables again:~) I did what I used to do as a child, which is to tap my hand as I said the word. If I tapped once, the word had one syllable; twice it had two syllables, and so on.
Sometimes, this didn’t work so well. So, I did what any good blogger would do and went to visit Google. I found a syllable checker which allowed me to check my words for how many syllables were in them. Whatever did we do before Google?
Writing Haiku
For me, writing a Haiku poem was hard:~) As I started writing, I found that I couldn’t stop the poem at three lines. Before I knew it, I had written more verses.
While my poems all use the 5-7-5 Haiku structure, they aren’t true Haiku poetry, but rather my adaptation of it. I hope you enjoy them and forgive me for not being faithful to true meaning of Haiku poetry.
Coming Storm
Wind from storm picks up
Neighbor chimes sound like church bells
Birds fly home to treesOld dog walks slowly
Thunder cries hurry inside
Too late; rain falls hardWet dog and scared me
Shake off the raindrops that fell
Pleased to be home safe.Cycle of Life
Seeds sink into ground
Green bud raises flimsy stem
Flower opens in timeDead flower falls down
Spreading seeds all over ground
Rain washes the seedsSun warms up wet floor
Tiny seeds couple with soil
Nature’s womb quickensLife is a cycle
From planting seeds for flowers
To a baby’s cryLazy Cat
The lazy cat sleeps
Comfy in her double bed
Waiting to be fedThe lazy cat sleeps
Thunder booms loudly outside
Cat finds place to hide.The scared cat must wait
Hidden away for storm to pass
No cat food alasThe scared cat comes out
Eats her fill, crunch, crunch, and then
The lazy cat sleeps
Closing thought: From now on, I’m going to include a section in these challenge posts about what I learned.
For this one, I learned that it’s important for me to have a beginning, middle and end with my writing. This is probably why story or narrative writing is my favorite.:~) Even so, I really enjoyed the structure and challenge of Haiku.
What about you?
How do you feel about Haiku poetry?
What’s your favorite kind of poetry?
Are you up for a dare? Can you write your comment in the Haiku style? More than three lines are allowed, but keep to the 5-7-5 structure.









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Cheers, poetic friend!
Your haiku poems are quite good.
A tip o’ the hat to ya!
;-D
.-= Robert Hruzek´s last blog ..A Tale of Two Corridors =-.
@ Robert — You did very well with your haiku and I appreciated the correction. It is hard to get the syllables right and have it make sense, isn’t it? Thank you for your comment:~)
Oops! Last line should read,
A tip o’ the hat!
.-= Robert Hruzek´s last blog ..A Tale of Two Corridors =-.
I am crap at writing haiku, even though, apart from nursery rhymes, it was the first form I learned. As for yours, you rulebreaker, I LOVE them! Truly, I adore these! All three are just delightful. Gush gush gush, but I found them a pleasure.
I feel too constricted writing haiku, not just because of the syllabic requirements, but because they are traditionally nature poems, and I can’t let my imagination dance the way I like to.
My favorite style is my own mix of styles. I like to rhyme some of it, switch up the meter, go free verse and then back again. It isn’t that I can’t write structured poetry–I can–I just feel that I do my best work writing from instinct.
Bless you, for that syllable counter! I just use my hands and write the number in the left margin. People often tell me my poetry has a nice flow, and that is part of the reason why, if it does. That, and the Golden Ear method lol.
Sara’s haikus please
Like a misty bridge arches
And sunflowers lean
.-= Fireblossom´s last blog ..Eunice =-.
@ Fireblossom — I love your poetry just the way it is:~) I also like that you know how YOU want to write poetry. That’s something this challenge is teaching me — what works and what doesn’t work for me regarding poetry. I also think that people are right about the flow of your poetry as even your free verse sounds good when I read it aloud.
I’m glad to provide you with the syllable counter. I’m always amazed at what computer programmers can design. Things like spell-check, Rhyme Zone and the syllable checker are such a great help. I imagine, however, there’s a lot of code that goes into these programs. I’m one of those people, who still can’t figure how the radio works!
I agree about traditional haiku. It doesn’t really work for me either. It’s not the nature part I struggle with, but the brevity:~)
No Haiku I try
No words will I write for it
No never not me
.-= desk49´s last blog ..Was it- =-.
@ desk49/Ellis — So, I guess how you feel about haiku! Thanks for the comment, Ellis:~)
the words are chosen
making a cause and effect
a haiku is born
.-= Talon´s last blog ..I always suspected =-.
@ Talon — that’s great…I hope your haiku was an easier “labor” than mine:~)
Hi Sara,
Crazy this Haiku
Like making passionate love
In a sleeping bag!
Preferred poetry?
Not really one for me
Such difficult task!
Rather better write
Forgetting having to rhyme
And simply just write
Impossible task
This one challenge would have been
Without helpful link!
Now I am to write
Freewill and within my taste
Without using brakes!
Hope I didn’t have
Throughout this entire process
Screw up very much!
Raul
.-= Alien Ghost´s last blog ..The Problem With Life =-.
@ Alien Ghost — Your talent overwhelms me…this is great:~) I love the line “without using brakes.” I agree it is a challenge to write in the 5-7-5 structure. I felt the same way, but then I got into the challenge!!! The syllable site really does help. I enjoyed your multi-verse haiku poem and thank you for sharing it:~)
Lovely poetry
From a talented lady
Very nicely done
@ Linda — Now, that’s a nice haiku and comment. Thank you very much:~)
Haiku is lovely
Thank you for teaching me how
to count it up right
@ Lynn — Glad to be of assistance! I liked your haiku comment very much…hmmm maybe I should a regular feature and have all comments written in haiku….then again, maybe not!!
Thanks for the comment:~)
The beauty of words
reflected in your haiku
gives me a warm glow
@ Belinda — This is such a sweet and kind haiku. Thank you very much:~)
BTW I read your post about Italian food and life lessons. It is excellent and very well done.
Some of us were meant
to misplace our umbrellas
and swirl in the rain
Okay. I wasn’t able to write my comment in a haiku — but this post was really helpful to me. I recently joined twitter and found a whole group of folks who use the 140-character limit as a form to fill… with haiku! It had been so long since I’d written one, I wasn’t sure how to dive in. When I saw the title of your post, I laughed aloud. You’ve helped me a lot today. I want to play with this form again.
One thing that sticks with me about haiku, and I think I read it in a book by Natalie Goldberg, is that there should be a moment of opening or “ah-ha” within the structure, where the world seems suddenly bigger or more meaningful than before. Where the expected idea of the poem is turned on its head, or doesn’t materialize, maybe. Issa and Basho are two of my favorites poets for achieving that.
I really liked the Cycle of Life poem. But I bet you could see that coming!
.-= Meredith´s last blog ..golden happiness =-.
@ Meredith — That’s okay. I really liked your haiku, especially the “and swirl in the rain.” It creates so many images in my mind:~) Thanks for the information about Issa and Basho. Even if I’m not very good at haiku, it doesn’t mean I can’t read other haiku poems and enjoy them for their ability to capture a thought or a description with such beautiful simplicity.
You’re right. I can see you liking the Cycle of Life best. Thanks for visiting and leaving me the gift of your haiku:~)
Haiku is my zen
Quiet words to calm my mind
Thankful for your thoughts
.-= Melissa´s last blog ..Thankful Thursday =-.
@ Melissa — This is a wonderful haiku comment:~) It reminds me that haiku is a form of meditative poetry. It teaches (and this I have learn this) how to let go with discipline, even when writing:~)
Thanks for the visit and your haiku!
Dang it, late again!
Upstaged by other comments
Am gonna sulk now!
@ Tony — that’s okay…I live by my mom’s reminder: Better late than never:~)
Hi Sara .. I love poetry of all sorts – mostly that which rhymes ..
So haiku ..
Setting sun cuts through
spreading orange glow skywards
portent of tomorrow
It’s cloudy here – every hopeful! It’s still summer I think – but we need the rain ..
Have a great weekend .. Hilary
.-= Hilary´s last blog ..Could this be a sitcom – or a break out sitcom Ever had a one word – at a time – conversation Fish and Chips – how do you spell it =-.
@ Hilary — I hope your haiku come true:~) I usually poetry that rhymes, as well, but I do like some forms of free verse.
Hope your weekend went well:~)
Hi Sara!
I am a rhymer
It’s melody like music
Poetry to me
hugs
suzen
.-= suzen´s last blog ..Getting Organized Notes from the Queen of Juggle =-.
@ SuZen — You and Hilary agree. If you decide to write some poetry, here’s a good site for you. It’s called the Rhyme Zone. It makes rhymes so much easier:~)
LOL
Sara that was my haiku.
.-= desk49´s last blog ..Was it- =-.
HI Sara,

What an innovative idea. I couldnt be caught writing a haiku..more so cause whoever reads it wont understand it..forget anyone…even I wouldnt understand me
But I like how you have done such a beautiful job with ti..and the comments are all so haiku!
My hubby loves anything and everything poetry and haiku…so am gonna run this by him. You never know I might come back later…and he might write something here
Lots of love,
Z~
p.s. Its been so long since i came here. Was busy relocating home….am back on my blogging schedule since the past few weeks..so am just getting my feet wet again. Will be here more often. I promise.
@ Zeenat — No problem about the haiku. I’m just glad you stopped by for a visit. I really enjoyed your last post, Trust is the Glue of Life:~)
Starts with one small drop
Everything begins to change
One Drop, One Step, You
Okay, that didn’t work like I wanted, but it was worth a shot. I love the different forms of poetry – and it is always such a treat to see what people can do off the top of their head or with such thought.
.-= Exceptional Ten Year Old´s last blog ..Taking Chances – A Year Anniversary =-.
@ The Exception — I like this one as you made it about personal change, which is kind of cool. Have you changed the name of blog?
Hi Sara,
Poems so lovely…
Haiku responses by most..
A warm glow ensues..
.-= Joy´s last blog ..Fearless Fun Friday- Break a Barrier… =-.
@ Joy — Thanks for sharing your haiku. It’s perfect for you…I like the line “a warm glow ensues.” I appreciate your comment:~)
Sara,
I’m a lover of Haiku and your poetry. My favourite one of these three is Coming Storm as I can’t get enough of storms. I’m really enjoying watching you play with poetry. I wonder when this challenge is over if you might miss it.
Here’s a challenge for you about what you learned
Re; having a beginning, a middle and an ending… you could try just writing 3 lines, where line 1 is the beginning, line 2 is the middle and line 3 is the ending. Are you up for it? 
.-= Davina´s last blog ..I’m Not Blogging You Are =-.
@ Davina — I know you like haiku as I read several of your poems on your site and they are always excellent. I agree with your challenge. I’ll see what I can do:~)
Writing haiku bores me.
Yet appreciate i can.
A matter of taste.
.
There you go. lol
Personally i find haiku very easy.
But i dont think as a form it can cover even half of the beauty of poetry.
But that’s just my personal opinion.
.
my preference is free flow.
Because the are no limitations.
.
Also there is debate about whether haiku actually has to fit into the 5-7-5 rule.
Because japanese sounds are different to sylables.
I like your haiku.
They are rather instructional in style
.-= Arts web show´s last blog ..Pictures and colours remix =-.
@ Arts web show — I like the challenge of haiku, but not the actual poetry, if that makes sense. I tend to prefer either rhyming poetry or free verse. I also discovered the idea of visual poetry and that fascinates me.
I didn’t know about the debate, but it makes sense.
Thanks for the visit:~)
My biggest problem with haikus were the syllable-counting. Sometimes, when it comes to diphthongs, I am a little confused about how things should be counted. And then there are words like “pickle”. Is that one or two syllables? In linguistics, sometimes this is written as a shewa (which is a vowel) and sometimes a dark l (a consonant). I can’t decide whether to treat it as a syllable or not. That said, I still like the rhythm, as long as nobody is checking to see if I counted things right.
My favorite kind of poetry is the limerick. Those are fun.
.-= Kelvin Kao´s last blog ..A Little of Everything =-.
@ Kelvin — That’s why I found the syllable counter on line. Using my normal style of tapping my hand didn’t always work.
I imagine you would like limericks. Now, that would be a challenge to write. Come back some time and leave me a limerick:~)
Congrats on your new site!!!
Couldn’t help myself
I had to take up this dare
Beauty in comments
(Fun challenge! Also, I liked “Lazy Cat”)
.-= Amanda Linehan´s last blog ..The Joy of Procrastination =-.
@ Amanda — I’m pleased that you took on the challenge and I like your haiku:~) Thanks about Lazy Cat, too.
Thanks for sharing your thoughts about this:~)
Took the challenge
Against better judgment
Haikus and me do not agree
.-= Colleen´s last blog ..Memorial Held Tonight in Rememberance of Nagasaki Bombing =-.
@ Colleen — At least you tried. That’s the whole idea is to see what’s works for you and what doesn’t. Just like I said, haiku isn’t my favorite form of poetry either, but it is challenging.
Thanks for the visit:~)