The RWH prompt from Write on Edge: In four hundred words or less, write a fiction piece based on a definition of the word “flavor.”
I’m not sure I totally got this prompt right, but I had lots of fun writing it. Thanks to Cameron for suggesting it:~)
“Class, swirl your wine and sniff it.” Mattie’s voice was so serious, Harrison almost laughed.
Usually, Mattie was the one laughing, but this was the final test for her Wine Educator Certificate. He was here to give her moral support.
Harrison swirled his wine. The woman beside him followed his example, but spilled wine down her shirt.
She giggled. “Oops, my bad!”
Mattie sighed. Harrison handed the woman his handkerchief, noticing her twinkly green eyes.
“Who wants to tell us what they smell?” Mattie asked.
The woman with the stained shirt waved her hand. “I’ll try!”
Mattie looked wary, but no one else volunteered. “Okay, Lilly, what do you smell?”
Lilly sniffed. The wine went up her nose. She sneezed. Red wine flew everywhere. People ducked. Harrison laughed out loud; he couldn’t help himself.
Lilly lifted her glass. “Sorry! It went up my nose. Let me try again.” Mattie stopped her.
“That’s okay, Lilly! Let’s taste our wine now.”
After everyone had a taste, Mattie asked Harrison, “What flavors do you taste in the wine, sir?
He swirled the wine in his mouth and spit it out. “I think I taste blackberries, a hint of vanilla and maybe…chocolate?” He made his voice uncertain.
“You’ve got a good palate!” Mattie acted like he’d won a prize. Both knew he had more than a good palate! After all, he was a Master Sommelier.
“It tastes like wine to me, but it’s good!” Lilly put her glass down with a clunk. Red wine spilled again.
Mattie glared at Lilly, but didn’t say anything.
The class progressed. Lilly spilled more wine. She laughed at her klutziness. Harrison liked her ease with herself; she wasn’t pretentious, kind of like his favorite Pinot Noir.
As Mattie enthused about the flavors of wine, all Harrison wanted was to taste the flavors of Lilly. Breathing in her smell – jasmine, citrus, with a hint of deodorant – he watched her sip her wine. Heat rose in his face thinking about tasting her full red lips.
She left early, disappointing Harrison. But when he stepped outside, she was waiting wearing a sexy grin.
He discovered she was also a Sommelier, but hired to test Mattie’s ability to handle difficult students. Mattie passed, just barely.
Later that night over a bottle of wine, Harrison leaned over, kissed Lilly and said, “Hmmm. Sweet, slightly salty with just a hint of an excellent Pinot.









{ 36 comments… read them below or add one }
A secret shopper – I didn’t see that coming.
I think you did great! Your story is full of flavor.
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@ Lynn — It was fun to write this one. I’m pleased you enjoyed the flavors. Thanks for tasting it:~)
This made me smile….thanks.
Ken
@ Ken — I love it when people smile!
Hi Sara! Always the surpriser you are! Well done!
Hugs
Susan
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@ Susan — Surprises are fun and thank you for reading this:~)
I loved the paragraph where Harrison was thinking about breathing in the flavors of Lilly. I couldn’t quite tell what his relationship was to Mattie, so I couldn’t tell whether his ultimately departing with Lilly was a betrayal of some kind. But I liked the twist that she was acting that goofy on purpose. She seemed kind of overblown until that point came out, and that made her make perfect sense in the context of the story.
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@ Jessie — Thanks for reading this story. I’m pleased you liked the “twist.”
Yeah….that relationship between Mattie and Harrison. That was a case of an untimely edit. Sometimes the word limit is a killer:~)
Being part of several wine related groups, this is “write” up my alley. Sorry I had to. This was well told, and I was surprised by the second “plant”. I think it fit the flavor prompt quite well, and served up a bit of romance in the end. I bet it would be interesting to watch two Sommeliers sharing (analyzing) a bottle of wine.
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@ Linda — Yes, this story was “write” up your alley. Also, I had to rewrite this story, partly because of you. Originally, the story had them tasting the wine before they smelled it. Then JC reminded me that’s not the correct order. I changed it with the knowledge that you’d probably catch my BIG mistake.
I agree with you about the two Sommeliers sharing a bottle of wine…now that’s another story possibility:~) You’re turn!
Sara this was a delightful read!
I think you worked the prompt well, too; and I chuckled aloud when I read the last bit. That was a perfect ending. I like how you tied the wine tasting into their romantic interlude and love a story that comes full circle, so to speak. Well done.
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@ Davina — It’s nice to see your face in the comment box. I’m glad you liked the story. It was a tight fit, but was fun to write:~)
Nice take.
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@ idiosyncraticeye — Thank you:~)
This was a fun read. That Lilly would have driven me crazy. You shouldn’t have to put up with a student like that…even if it was all an act
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@ Carrie — She was a bit of a pain, but for a good cause. Mattie got through it just fine.
Thank you for reading this story and sharing your thoughts about it:~)
Loved it!
I, too, was a little confused on the relationship between Harrison and Mattie, but assumed that since Harrison didn’t feel guilty over his sudden liking of Lily’s taste, than all must be well.
I truly enjoyed when Harrison analyzed her smell like wine! Favorite line: Harrison liked her ease with herself; she wasn’t pretentious, kind of like his favorite Pinot Noir.
Excellent twist at the end, a great read!
Barbara @ de rebus, via Write on Edge´s last [type] ..taste of childhood
@ Barbara — That’s what happens when you start editing to word limits. Originally, the story had Harrison making it clear he and Mattie were “just friends,” but then something had to go. Perhaps I chose the wrong cut.
I’m pleased you liked that line. This was a fun write and gave me a chance to practice being less serious and using dialogue more.
I appreciate the read very much:~)
I Lilly is one of my daughters….same obnoxiousness
I like the dialogue…it’s cute but revealing.
Good work
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@ Lance — Oh, dear…having a daughter like Lilly might be a wee bit challenging:~) But then again, Lilly was fun…at least to Harrison. Perhaps not so much to Mattie.
Thanks for reading this story. I appreciate it:~)
Breathing in Lilly.. my favorite line. Fabulous!
@ Lindy — Thank you! I’m pleased you enjoyed it:~)
Sara, you’ve done it again! In so few words, so much story! And I think you explored the prompt a couple of times! Good job! I enjoyed this a lot and now I have to hope I have enough wine in the house for a glass, because you have made me want some!
@ Jean — Did you read Linda’s comment and my reply. JC had to give me a quickie wine tasting lesson…I had things a bit mixed up:~)
I appreciate your comment and thanks for enjoying the story!
I loved the twist at the end where she’s a sommelier, too
… And a consummate actress! Great happy ending… I hope that it worked for them.
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@ Asproulla — We aim to please and I’m happy that you enjoyed the happy ending. I used write only happy ending stories, but I’ve sort of strayed into the dark side. It was nice to write a happy story for once:~)
Thanks for reading this and sharing your thoughts.
I love this Sara! The twist over Lilly’s true identity was a fun revelation! I’d say she played her part perfectly!
Valerie´s last [type] ..A Taste of the World
@ Valerie — That she did and I bet she had a good time, even if Mattie didn’t.
Thanks for reading this story:~)
I loved this Sara. I did not see the ending coming at all. It is amazing to me how much you can fit into such a short piece. I could imagine all of them and picture exactly what was happening although I know nothing about wine.
I hope you realize just how gifted you are.
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@ Ginny — Yes. It’s the quite the challenge to make the word count in some of these prompts, but it gave me a chance to work on dialogue and to write a lighter story than I’ve been writing lately.
I pleased you read it and liked it:~)
I’m feeling a little icky about Harrison. He comes off as a little pretentious, and his waffling about the two women gets under my skin.
Perhaps I’m reading it wrong, but it seems like he’s stepping out on someone who’s nervous and in need of his support.
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@ Cameron — I’m not sure what to say about Harrison, except he really did mean well. I’m sure he’d be hurt to know he was seen as “pretentious” given his wine background:~) Let me clarify: Harrison was only friends with Matty. One of my mistakes was not being clear about this. It was in the first draft, but didn’t make it to the second. Tight word counts can be a bitch sometimes, but that’s why they’re such a challenge (and so much fun).
I do appreciate your read of this story and sharing your thoughts about it.
Niiiice. I like the way the flavor concept winds through the piece ending up on Lily’s lips.
So lovely to read your work again and thank you for your message!
The crack in the sky pic was also ‘a bit special too.’ (More UK slang for brilliant.)
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@ pea — YEAH! I’ve missed you. I’ll stop by your site tomorrow. I’ve been busy writing. Hey, I love UK slang. My daughter lives in London. I pick up stuff from her all the time:~)
Thank you for your nice words about the story! It was a fun write.
I love the story and would like to meet Lilly!
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@ Kelvin — Lilly had to do some major “acting” in that story. I’m pleased you liked it.